The scent of sun is in your hair
with the salt smell from the waves
crashing onto the shore.
Waters sparkles in sunglints
and bursts into flame in the clear blue
sky of your eyes.
Heat rises with the day
light and sun glow on your skin.
Above us, the gulls call to the sea
and the wild sound of surf pounds
in my breast.
Startled, I wake from a dream of the ocean
to cries of gulls wheeling in the icy air
and the chill of winter in your eyes.
What a metaphor, really enjoyed reading this.
This poem has a wonderful transition. A very, very good dream….then suddenly turned bad. The ending is breathtakingly chilling.
Wow. Just… wow.
Loved everything about this.
I enjoyed this so much. Here in the desert, I am enjoying warmth, egrets, doves, lots of songbirds. Keep those dreams alive–good weather will be there before you know it and the west will be feeling the effects of this terrible drought. I really enjoy your poetry, Kathleen.
Thank you, Victoria – that really means a lot to me for you to say. We are having our first real winter weather – snow, sleet and freezing rain and cold temps – nothing as dramatic as back east or even the south. Spring will arrive soon with the first service berry blooms along the ridges. Spring always comes!
Oh wow, what a contrast from the dream of sun and sea and warmth, to the “chill of winter in your eyes”.
are you dreaming of spring… those last few words haunting
I admire the twist in the ending, wow ~ Sharp turn from sun lit scenery to coldness of the person beside you ~ What a lovely dream but a cold reality ~ So well done ~
By the way K, I noted that you followed my WP blog which is inactive. My active blog is here:
Have a great weekend ~
oh heck – what a fall in those last lines… it was so nice and warm – and then the unexpected chill setting in…
Wow, great twist — hot to cold.
Pleasure, knowing itself through pain.
To go from the warmth of a dream to the winter that extend into the eyes is startlingly good. I think there has to be purpose of such dreams.
Oh, what a sad finish. I was basking in your words until then, they were so beautiful and lulling. The final words are beautiful too, but far from lulling.
Yowza! You went from “hot” to “cold” very quickly. I like! Thank you.
oy, temperature changed really fast on that one…i was enjoying the beach and warm thoughts…considering it is somewhere around 0 right about now…of course the weather makes for a fine metaphor for relationships as well…
started off sounding like a fun day at the beach… then, back to the sad reality of winter and it’s below-freezing windchill. I also paid attention to the mentioning of someone’s eyes… this also seems to be about waking up to a person who’s not as nice as they are in your dreams/fantasies. A lot to take from this; loved it!
started off sounding a rad day at the beach, then back to the sad reality of winter and it’s below-freezing windchill… I did pay attention to the mentioning of someone’s eyes as well; I think this also means waking up to a person who’s not as nice as they are in your dreams… lot’s to take in with this write;I love it.