Re-vision

Feb morning sky

I cultivate clouds
raking them just so
into rows of wings
and birdsong

I cultivate clouds
raking them just so
into rows of birds
and wing song (revised)

I cultivate clouds
raking them just so
into rows of wings
and wind song (revised)

I cultivate wings
raking them just so
into rows of clouds
and wind song (revised)

I cultivate winds
raking them just so
into rows of birds
and cloud song (revised)

6 thoughts on “Re-vision

  1. I cant tell you how much I LOVE these verses! I am a huge sky watcher and lover of clouds, adore the photo and the words are perfection, each verse. I think my fave is the first but it was cool to see the change of word placement in subsequent verses. Way cool.

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