Gaze on ancient brothers,
galaxy sky dancing,
graced by mythos and
gloried tales of old Rome.
Glistening twins, long dead,
guard our own nights sky and
gibbous October moon.
Onyx sky above us,
offering cold bright stars
opulent in their glory.
Only for us are these
obliged to sparkle-
ordered by heavens
own heroic hunter.
*** For dVerse Meeting the Bar prompt from Vandana Sharma. She brings us a new form “Pleiades” which was invented in 1999 by Craig Tigerman. It consists of seven lines, each line starting with the same letter as the title. The title is a single word.
there is so much in the night sky… in the inky night where you live
Being a Gemini, the first poem resonates most with me. Wow, you just whipped another one out for Kathleen too; very cool, & perfect take on the prompt.
Rather partial to the Orion one, it flows so well that it does not bring attention to the lines starting with the same letter, that kind of disappears as the words all come together in one thought. And that is the magic isn’t it, when the words go so well together that it just pulls one into the poem. Orion is that good. Well done.
p.s. my favorite moon photo too!
ha..perfect three…i love the onyx sky…you’ve written so beautifully…
To use the constellations was nice.. I liked that too. And you did three perfect one.
You’ve managed to meet the form seamlessly with these two poems–I like the Aries one, too 🙂
Clever girl ,managing two of these. I especially love the October gibbous moon!
I like the one about Orion..that is one of my favorite constellations.
If you keep on going, you will have a book to publish. Have at it!!! Although I do love your Ozark-related poetry, too.
Oh, these are both wonderful!
Galaxy sky dancing & onyx sky above us, how heavenly they look ~
Love your constellations Kathleen ~
That’s an intriguing form. You’ve carried it off beautifully.
Hope we see more of these …
Very nice! I like the words ‘onyx’ and ‘glistening’. I have been obsessed with counting syllables in lines and you have done sixes so well! Jane
i like the onyx sky and the dancing galaxy
I liked your rich words ( sent me scurrying to the dictionary for gibbous ) and the feel of this. It was fun to read, almost luxurious
The constellations in their full glory 🙂 thanks for your lovely response.
excellent….love the play in the first one, the mix of myth and sky dancing…ha….and it flows nicely through the constraints….you did really well with this form Kathleen….
Nice….do you have one for Aries, the Ram?
Just for you!
As we lay slumbering,
above us rich pastures
appear -sparkling flocks of
ancient stars. Guarded by
argent Aries, silver
adventurer, spring ram,
agent of our nights dreams.
this is amazing, you know me too an aries!!
Oh yes, thank you, Kathleen!
Perfect capture of argent Aries ~