Early morning fog obscures the eastern ridge,
holding the dawning sun at bay-
resting its gray blanket across the still waters,
soft as the color of heron wings.
Warm fog obscures the bath’s mirror-
holding the real world at bay.
Resting your face against my neck-
softly our hair entwines, the color of heron wings.
*** for imaginary garden with real toads 55 word prompt and poets united poetry pantry
the fog this morning IS the color of heron wings. thank you!
this is so beautiful and full of tender love…exquisite…
Thank you so very much – K
This is so lovely…sigh…
This feels like an intimate grey morning and it reads like a warm bowl of soup, comforting oneself from the elements.
Lovely, keeping the world at bay is sometimes a wonderful thing.
Yes, it is – thanks for dropping by and commenting – i appreciate it!
The color of heron wings – what a lovely image of dawn and love you depict here. Love it.
Luv how you images the heron, have a nice Sunday, Thanks for dropping in at my blog
what beautiful lovefilled lines… amazing .. specially liked this
“resting its gray blanket across the still waters,”
it is a beautiful poem kathleen…love the inclusion of the heron wings as the color…and the entwining hair has a cool intimacy to it.
Kathleen, this is just beautiful. So still. So gentle. So filled with love.
This is gorgeous!
The cycle of nature mirrored! Gorgeous and evocative. One I wish I had written and I will keep in my file of poems I must live with!
Susan – your comment has left me speechless – thank you so much for this great compliment – K
A very tender comparison here, with a softness of feathers and mist, but a warmth of real things as well; the two stanzas make very effective iterations/reflections of the original metaphor.
So very romantic. Herons are wonderful creatures.
Yes, they are – I love watching them in our cove – graceful in flight – K
This poem has such astounding beauty in both the imagery and the sounds. The parity of the images is just perfect.
Thank you for your kind words – K
For me, the way you composed this in two separate but connected parts really felt organic and well delivered.
Such a soothing image… I love the sounds, the progression, everything so gentle. ♥
So beautiful. I miss morning fog on the water…….love the hair entwining, the color of heron wings. Whose wonderful heron-picture is that?
We got this at a fund raiser for the Audubon society – silent auction – the photographer was there and signed it for me. I have subsequently changed whole color scheme in the house to match this beautiful bird – ended up being a very expensive purchase lol
The gentle depiction of the love with those heron wings.. Love that image.
Oh my goodness! You and I have written so similarly, in some ways, though so differently in others! Spooky! I love your soft depiction of these lovers and birds.
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And I loved your poem – a faerie story of changelings and feathered armed women – wonderful -tried to comment on your poem – but not sure it made its way to you.
It didn’t. Not sure why, but I’m delighted to know that you liked it!