its an odd phrase
one that makes you wonder
how the novelist would even conceive of the idea
and I wish I could remember where I read it
‘I would know your hands
in a bucket full of hands’
it caught me off guard
and kinda distasteful
how could an editor let that phrase go by
or was it debated and argued over
for days on end
but I know
it was meant to convey
I would know your hands
in a bucket full of hands
I like the idea of building a poem around a quoted metaphor. This works really well.
if ever there were a moment that was both “ew” and “aww” 🙂 definitely a unique expression of love!
The phrase immediately brought to mind Carolyn Forche’s poem, The Colonel http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/180106
Without the reference I could see something not sinster but artistic even intimate. Either way, I appreciate your take because it makes me think and that’s always a good thing.
What an odd phrase, but I like it.
An absolutely excellent line, and a poem to match. Makes me feel kind of ooey, but it works!
I’m not sure I would recognize my own hands in a bucket of others… It is an odd phrase though I don’t find it creepy, maybe because I associate it with working hands. Anyway, you’ve done a nice job here and I like this poem.
Oh yikes…that really is a rather gross thought in one way…but in another it speaks of the intimacy that underlies it. And thanks so much for putting Lady Antebellum in my head. There one of hers (about one o’clock in the morning) that positively invades me. But I suppose if you have to have earworms,, at least she’s good.
Well, as someone else said that IS quite a creepy phrase; but I know its sentiments don’t intend to have it be creepy. Really interesting which phrases have impact on a person though, I think, and which promptly pass out of one’s head.
Just love this – tis indeed a wonderful response to the prompt.
It’s funny how those things stand out, even years later. Nicely done.
That phrase would jumped out for me too…somehow it connotes for me intimacy ~
That’s a great little poem that cuts beyond the prompt and takes the reader into a whole realm of relationships. Nice work 🙂
This says so much–this is love and knowledge in all its fullness, in one creepy phrase. LOVE.
Loved that last image you set up.>KB
Brings to mind the e.e. cummings quote: nobody, not even the rain, had such small hands; a piece Woody Allen used in HANNAH & HER SISTERS; love what you did with this, and spiritually we would always recognize our lover’s hands & heart midst the plethora of others.
Ah this is so well done. A disturbing line to be sure, but it reminded me of a talk show I caught (by accident) one day about couples being tested on how well they know the spouses by their legs and feet. It was weird how many got it wrong! LOL…you took me down a very random side road on memory lane. Love it. Thanks!
Wonderful line.. still a little unsettling.. this is a wonderful response to the prompt
smiles…its a cool line for sure…i would probably not even need to see them…just feel their touch to know….you know…smiles…cool response kathleen….
‘I would know your hands
in a bucket full of hands’… oh i like this much… it tells so much about the relationship…really cool