waves ruffle across the water’s surface
sunlight glinting at the crests
sends dazzling sparks of light
across the rocky cove
waves oscillate through space and matter
without seismic displacement
sends shocking particles electrical
across the spatial disturbance
waves of grief wash across my heart
tears displace my resolve
as you look back and raise your hand
shielding your eyes from the suns bright glare
or is it to wave goodbye
Really powerful, especially that last verse. Wow.
Thank you for dropping by and for your kind comment
The last verse was particularly poignant. One of my co-workers will be dealing this weekend with her mother’s death (she likely passed sometime this afternoon). It wasn’t unexpected, but sad nonetheless.
Its hard no matter the circumstances-
thanks Nancy – K
Oh this is deeply felt! Great work.
Thanks so much
Beautiful work K ~ I like the moving waves of water to the waves of grief or sadness ~
Thank you, Grace – that means a lot- K
Oh, I really like this… The last stanza took my breath away.
Thank you, Mary – happy you liked it- K
Anaphora here works to build the emotional context and it arrives powerfully at the end. Lovely and engaging.
Thank you, Anna – happy you dropped by and so appreciate your kind comment
I really enjoyed this–the transition from nature to life and loss. I found your response perfect…subtle but effective.
Thanks, Victoria – I am pleased that you feel it worked for the prompt – have really enjoyed reading the variety of choices from the poets – thanks for the prompt and your time – so appreciate it – K
Dear Kathleen, Your poem is excellent. Sending blessings and love, Ellen
Thanks Ellen – so appreciate your kindness – hope you are enjoying your summer and it is filled with the blessings of lots of visiting family and friends – hugs – K
mmm whole lot of emotion in that last stanza…and that kinda goodbye will def ripple out…i like how this builds kathleen…
Thanks, Brian – and was so moved by your poem – the water under the bridge – just really striking image – smiles – K
this is so thick with emotions k. – the last bit with the looking back really brought me almost to tears.. felt grief in this…and the anaphora so subtle and yet so powerful
Thank you, Claudia – I wasn’t sure if it worked or not for the prompt, so I am pleased that you thought it did! K