Blue Sky
From dawn’s horizon
Blue sky into blue water
The swallow flies to her mate
Waking to dawn’s light
Blue sky into your blue eyes
My heart flies to my lover
**** a form called sedoka from Japan for todays dVerse prompt
thecourseofourseasons
Observations from the Garden
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I enjoyed your poem, and also experimenting with this form which was new to me.
Wow! Fantastic response to the prompt. 🙂
Poetical genius! This is another great work on the sedoka- two variations on a theme. What a romantic write. -Mike
hard to beat a comment like that – smiles – so happy you liked it! thanks – K
Just gorgeous!
thank you so much, Rosemary, so appreciate your kindness
Blue sky, blue eyes- love!
smiles – K
nice play with the word blue
thanks – so happy you liked it !K
Lovely… I especially like the last line.
Thanks, Laurie – K
Oh so blue and refreshing, like a deep cool drink.
From without to within, clean and wholesome, like the olden days.
Thank you Aprille – K
Oh! wow it is just terrific, lovely:)
Thanks so much – K
Oh, this speaks of so much…lovely imagery.
Happy you liked it – thanks K
Love the turn and the play on blue.. the love and the sky.. very summery… Beautyful
And really loved your poem, Bjorn – thanks for dropping by! K
…lovely sedoka…but the 2nd one truely wwwww2
Really happy you liked it- thanks! K
..oh, what happened to my comment… lol… sorry about that… i didn’t recheck before i left… anyway i meant to say i really really like your sedoka especially that second tercet where you gave birth to the line ‘blue sky into your blue eyes’ …now that’s rather good than to look at eyes looking like the night… lovely piece… smiles…
hilarious – just figured it was lost in the vapor – thanks for your extended comment – happy you enjoyed it! K
Wonderful parallels in the two verses, with each image strengthening the other. Well done!
Thank you , Samuel – loved learning about the form K
aww..this is beautifully romantic…love how it flows from nature images to love..
Really enjoyed the exercise – it was fun to write – thanks, Claudia! K
Even better with each successive reading ~ M
what a nice thing to say – thank you! K
this is beautiful. I love the swallows that nest in our bluebird boxes, the way they swoop and feed on the wing
they are beautiful birds – thanks – K
Oh this just sings for me!! The colors… the birds… the dawn… the love! Sedoka – A Summer Love Poem
so happy you liked it – thanks! K
The connection between the two stanzas is beautiful, and the suggested image of the heart like a sparrow really rings true. Excellent work!
thanks so much – appreciate your dropping by! K
Reading this made me smile, its so sweet.
So happy it did – thanks – K
Very nice job with the form/the turn in the second tercet.
Thank you Victoria – always happy when you drop by! K
Oooooh, really nice motifs, really textured.
thanks so much! K
Like the themes of sunrise, blue sky & love ~ The twist between the verses is nicely done ~
Thank you Grace – i appreciate your comments – K
smiles…love abounds…from the birds and nature to…well you and your love…smiles…
very cool use of form ma’am
why thank you sir – always appreciate your dropping by! K